Thursday, 20 July 2017
Would you, please, be so kind as to read and assess my essay (CPE Writing task 1 format). I'd really appreciate any advice and suggestions.
Read the two texts below.
Write an essay summarising and evaluating the key points from both texts. Use your own words throughout as far as possible, and include your own ideas in your answer.
Write your answer in 240-280 words.
We are increasingly familiar with some of the worst effects of unthinking, unmanaged, unsustainable tourism: previously undeveloped coastal villages that have become sprawling, charmless towns, their seas poisoned by sewage, denuded of wildlife, their beaches stained with litter and tubes of sun cream; and historic towns, their streets now choked with traffic, their temples, churches and cathedrals seemingly reduced to a backdrop for holiday snaps that proclaim, ‘Been there. Done that’. Less appreciated, perhaps, is the social dislocation unsustainable tourism can cause: once-cohesive communities disrupted as the holiday industry replaces old crafts, turning fishermen into tour boat operators and farmers into fast-food store waiters or hotel cleaners.
Criticism of the tourism industry
Although its strongest critics view the tourism industry as a rapacious predator - moving on to fresh conquests after one environment has been spoiled, and forever fuelling the desires of holidaymakers with the prospect of a new paradise that must be enjoyed ‘before it’s gone’ - there are many within the industry who reject the claim. They are at least partly right. There are examples where the travel trade is doing better. Of course, reforming initiatives often come after the damage has been done and in some cases for public relations purposes rather than from a commitment to sustainability.
Write your essay.
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Tourism – time for reforms!
Over the past ten years or so the media have frequently carried reports of the appalling side-effects of mass tourism. The analysed texts are in tune with this both exploring the impacts of the tourism industry, yet from different perspectives.
The first extract evaluates the negative effects of unsustainable tourism on local communities from environmental as well as socio-cultural viewpoints. The presented arguments, in my opinion, are quite persuasive (which arguments?). Not only are the places of outstanding natural beauty being polluted and many species being deprived of their natural habitats to feed the insatiable monster of mass tourism, but also people living there have been deemed worthy only when they can serve the beast.
Friday, 14 July 2017
Dear CPESampleWritings team,
Please check my Essay
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Write a title !
The way in which we eat
has been is constantly (dramatically) changing, meaning that those old-fashion
dinners where all the family would come along together and share a
nice and comfy meal are prompt to disappear. Feedback: Careful with the use of "old-fashion". It has a negative connotation and it sounds like you are saying "I hate having dinner with my family, I think it is an old tradition that has to end".
Ecco il mio "article" per l'esame cambridge cpe.
Grazie in anticio,
An in-flight magazine has asked its readers to submit a light-hearted article with the title Space transport in 2050. Write an article describing future forms of transport and saying how you would take advantage of them.
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There are no limits with transport
Due to technological progress, mankind has developed different forms of transport such as cars, cycles and trains
, etc. However the possibility
of improving more and more has strongly promoted numerous research es
to find new and cheaper ways of moving from one place to another.
I really appreciated your last correction, and would kindly ask for this piece of writing to be checked out too.
Thanks in advance.
A cultural magazine is running a series on the educational value of historical films. It has invited readers to send in reviews of films which taught them about a period of history. You decide to send in a review. Your review should briefly describe the film and explain in what ways it interested you in the historical period concerned. Write your review.
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Film Review on “La vie est belle”
I really enjoyed the last number of this cultural magazine. In it, you invited readers to submit a review of a movie depicting a certain moment in history and by the way consider the pivotal contribution of the cinema world on educational fields. (Important Info is missing, like where the movie was filmed, or name of director, company which produced it... etc. So consider: My favourite film is a Warner Bros' 1998 classic, entitled...which was directed by... and starred...)